ConCrit of Pluto, by river_boat

Explanation: I'd offered concrit feedback here. river_boat was first to comment, for her vid Pluto (Buffy, lyrics here).

_{To clarify my Vocab (for us to be on the same page):
feel - something that doesn't sit right in my gut. Whenever I talk about 'how I feel' relative to a vid's beat, I'm talking about instinctive gut reaction, NOT emotional reaction
narrative - levels of storytelling, story structure
technique - the nuts and bolts of expressing a story
beat - includes musical beats and beats from every instrument including the human voice}

Overall Impression: GREAT VID. It has fantastic control of motion and very clear storytelling even though it's not linear and even though the only Buffy source I've seen is through vids. Love the song choice! Industrial sounding, and harsh and softened only slightly by the vocals.

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Note: Additional thoughts, comments, and discussion are welcome!