ConCrit of Be My Luck, by jackiekjono

Explanation: I'd offered concrit feedback here. jackiekjono's up next with Be My Luck (Cupid, lyrics here).

_{To clarify my Vocab (for us to be on the same page):
feel - something that doesn't sit right in my gut. Whenever I talk about 'how I feel' relative to a vid's beat, I'm talking about instinctive gut reaction, NOT emotional reaction
narrative - levels of storytelling, story structure
technique - the nuts and bolts of expressing a story
beat - includes musical beats and beats from every instrument including the human voice}

Overall Impression: This is so cute! Very bouncy and delightful, a joyful romp through various episodes of Cupid and the various couples that he brought together! Granted, part of this might be because I adore the song and it's happyness but it fits the mood of Cupid (the charater) very well from what I remember of him.

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Aaaaaand I'm all out of words at this point. ::peers at flist:: Any additional thoughts, comments, critique (esp. about my post itself) are all welcome! ::goes off to rewatch vid::