I have to head off for class before I can give detailed thoughts and feedback, but this I will say:
That is a work-in-progress? As far as I can tell, it is complete. It tells the story, and it tells it well. I have seen the movie, so the ending was a bit confusing for me ("I thought she gave him her hair") but then realized it was intentional on your part, to emphasize the Jerome/Vincent relationship.
I was only bugged by the scrolling "Gattaca" script (I would think you would know the source movie is Gattaca if you are watching this, making the script unnecceary) and the fact that you did not use the version of the song by the Smiths. However, the latter reason is an entirely personal one and I find I like this version as well, even though it is great fun to hear Morrissey croon.
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That is a work-in-progress? As far as I can tell, it is complete. It tells the story, and it tells it well. I have seen the movie, so the ending was a bit confusing for me ("I thought she gave him her hair") but then realized it was intentional on your part, to emphasize the Jerome/Vincent relationship.
I was only bugged by the scrolling "Gattaca" script (I would think you would know the source movie is Gattaca if you are watching this, making the script unnecceary) and the fact that you did not use the version of the song by the Smiths. However, the latter reason is an entirely personal one and I find I like this version as well, even though it is great fun to hear Morrissey croon.
More will come later.
...that is a WIP? Man.